雅思写作中：写作开头扣分点

　　观点武断 态度强硬

　　Topic1-The importance of confidence

　　In my opinion, confidence is the most important thing for a person. All thesuccessful people in the world are full of confidence. While those people whodon’t have confidence, they all have failed.

　　Topic 2 - The solution to the traffic problem

　　I think to solve the traffic problem, very easy! For those who don’t obeythe traffic rules, we should put all of them into prison. If we do that, I’msure there will be no traffic problem any more.

　　观点模糊态度暧昧

　　Topic-Should college students be allowed to get married?

　　I think this topic is very hard to say. Because I am still very little,only 17, and not married, so this topic is very difficult for me……

　　偏离主题

　　Topic-It is said that nowadays one can not acquire thequalifications and quality essential to success through university education. Towhat extent do you agree or disagree with the statement? (雅思真题)

　　I think to success, we must have a lot of important qualities. To havethese important qualities, we must learn a lot of things, for example, English,music tools, and etc. We can learn these qualities from our teachers, ourfriends and from books. All in all, we can learn from many places.

　　语法错误惨不忍睹

　　Topic-If children behave badly, should their parents acceptresponsibility and also be punished? (雅思真题)

　　About this problem, my think is if children behave badly, then parents arenot right. Because teach child is parent’s responsibility. So we also punishparents too besides children is also should.

　　过分简单没有重点

　　Topic-The importance of environmental protection

　　This issue is surely very important, let’s talk about it!

　　用词不当 表达不准

　　Topic-Should college students be allowed to get married?

　　I think college students should not be allowed to get married because theyare very young and so we can’t take the responsibility to form a family.

　　意思重复原地踏步

　　Topic-Your opinion on DINK families

　　My opinion on DINK families is that DINK families is not a good thing. Andit is a bad thing. It brings no benefits to our society and it is even sometimesharmful to our society.

　　中式英文

　　Topic 1-The happiest moment in your life

　　In our life, there are always some moments which make your heart floweropened angrily……

　　Topic 2- The population problem

　　The population problem is a very big problem. For example, in the citycenters of Shanghai, we can always see people mountain people sea there.

　　Topic3- Is there fairness in today’s business world?

　　I think in today’s society, there is no fairness in the business world. Forexample, I always chopped when I go out buy things……

　　Topic 4- The advantage of being a nice person

　　Being a nice person have many advantage. I believe if a people always dobad things, he will get “baoying”.
 

　　中国俗语胡乱翻译

　　Topic 1-Is it good to have a large family?

　　I think it is good to have a large family. Because we Chinese believe asentence: “Many sons, many lucks”……

　　正确说法：Happiness lies in having many children

　　Topic 2 -Should we pretend to know everything or admit our ignorance?

　　We all know, our Chinese old fathers and grandfathers said: “Know is know,don’t know is don’t know”……

　　Topic 3- Do you think one’s character is greatly influenced by his/herfamily?

　　Chinese old words says very good: Dragon born dragon, phoenix born phoenix,rat’s son can make hole……

　　Topic 4- The advantage of being a nice person

　　I believe one sentence:“A good person is all life safe”. We Chinese peoplealways say: “Good has good pay, bad has bad pay”.

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