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雅思写作6.5如何突破7.0大关呢

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     有很多学生,他们的词汇储蓄量不错,功底也非常不错的!但是令人意想不到的是,永远和雅思写作7.0无缘。我们觉得,他们的分数达到6.5的话,还是有不错的水平的!但是考试里面的论证的内容并没有达到真正7.0的水平,所以说需要很好地推论能力才能够让你迈过这道坎的。

  想到拿分,就得看看是如果的评分标准:

  1. Task Response

  2. Coherence & Cohesion

  3. Lexical resource

  4. Grammatical range & accuracy

  像我们所说的无法迈过7.0这个天阶的学生就是一二两条上面无法拿到分,而这两条也恰恰需要你的论证和逻辑能力水平有待提高。我们来看看一二两条拿高分的难点:从不同的角度和方面详细地论述论话题,做到deeper and wider,如果你将定位在6.5以下的话,就不需要那么麻烦了,可以将问题分析的非常简单即可!

  下面我们举一个例子实习分析一波:

  题目:有你会同意:保护濒临灭绝的物种是在浪费资源和财力?

  学生正文段写反对的论点,一共有三个:

  (论点1):Maintaining lives of these dying-out animals is far from describing the significance of existence of them. The value of using extractions from wild lives for research and development is immeasurable, so keeping biological diversity is a necessity for further exploration of advanced medicines in pharmaceutical area.
       (论点2)Moreover, permanent disappearance of certain species has the risk of breaking equilibrium of ecosystem. Once one of links of food chain is destroyed, the consequence afterwards is disastrous and irreversible.
       (论点3)In addition, since interference and invasion into animal’s habitats by human beings is the arch-criminal of extinctions of endangered species, humankind has obligation to do something o fix their faults.

  在这篇作文中,学生一共列举出来三个理由反对题目的观点,即动物本身价值,破坏生态平衡以及人类行为导致他们灭绝。学生一般都会有这种错觉,觉得论点越多,思路就显得越广,因此文章必定不错。但这个片段并没有对每一个论点给出具体的论证,从形式看是句句在理,而从内容来看则是空洞乏力。那怎么样才算是论证充分呢?

  我们来看下面的片段:

  It is vital that we appreciate the importance of endangered species in maintaining the balance of nature. (首句提出反驳题目的观点)
       Ecosystems are delicate arrangements where plants and animals all depend on each other for survival. (对于生态系统给出具体解释)
       The disappearance or introduction of any animal species disrupts the balance and negatively impacts upon other plants and animals by breaking the food chain and altering the habitat in     which they live. (给出假设:物种的引进和灭绝都会破坏平衡)
       Such imbalances frequently return to haunt us in unexpected ways. (阐述其结果:危害人类生存)
       Just as rabbits that were introduced to Australian soon after European settlement now compete with native species for food and destroy farmers’ crops, the extinction of a predator can cause plagues by allowing its prey to multiply unchecked. (举出实例:兔子带来的结果)
       Therefore, since endangered ecological change constitutes a potential risk to us and our environment, it is clearly in our own interests to protect endangered species. (回溯观点:威胁人类生存,保护濒危动物刻不容缓)

  我们在两个论述中发现,都是在论数量是要求量的多,三个方面阐述应该保护动物;下面的那一条则论述质量极高,即如何论证充分让其环环相扣。那到底哪个才接近7分以上作文的标准呢?当然是后者。

  为什么这种论述更具有充分性,更能够拿到高分 ,我们另一个话题中来看为什么:抽烟危害健康,为了公众的健康,政府应该禁止抽烟。你怎么看?

  很多同学估计都一个共性,会觉得赞同这个观点,却赞同的部分对于危害健康这个点无法将其论述的比较有充分性!说来说去几句话,就没了。想想我们应该怎么去写!

  我们来看范文的片段:

  Perhaps the strongest argument in favor of banning cigarettes and other tobacco products is that of public health. (首句概括主旨) It is an irrefutable fact that smoking leads to lung cancer and other such as potentially fatal diseases. (给出解释:抽烟导致癌症和其他疾病)Pro-smoking groups would no doubt agree that each individual has the right to determine what goes into his or her body. (让步观点:反对禁止抽烟者觉得这是他们的自由)Nevertheless, I would suggest that the interests and rights of society at large, must override those of the individual. (以退为进:必须看重大局利益)The medical treatment that smokers require is often incredibly costly, and it is frequently governments and society that cover these costs rather than the individual smoker. (给出另一个理由:香烟带来疾病,而疾病需要大量费用医治)Hence, laws prohibiting smoking would be entirely justified. (回溯观点:禁止抽烟合理性)


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