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雅思写作从大脑一片空白到拿下7分,我到底用了几步

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考试时间紧压力大?读完写作题大脑一片空白?动笔时能想一句算一句?匆匆忙忙凑满250个词?
 
-“别说了,写完我自己都看不下去”

雅思培训 雅思写作 7分


 
-“那你打算雅思写作拿多少分?”
-“……”

雅思培训 雅思写作 7分
 
-“雅思写作是最拉分的单项你知道伐?”
 
“别说了”

雅思培训 雅思写作 7分
 
还记得新航道小编之前给大家介绍过的:我在雅思写作均分5.34分的中国大陆考了一次雅思…新航道写作7分名师刘静老师给大家介绍了一些写作7分同学的备考案例,但有些同学表示“道理我都懂,但我拿到题目就是没想法怎么办嘛!”
 
别着急,刘静老师来救你了,此刘静非彼刘静,新航道写作明星讲师中有两位刘静老师,同名同姓!惊不惊喜意不意外!小刘静老师的真容我们最后来揭晓,快让我们进入“教你拥有写作好思路”的正题吧!
 
 
首先你需要明白,如果你的作文思路混乱,逻辑不清晰,会直接影响考官对TR以及CC的打分,词汇语法再亮眼,起到的加持作用也十分略微。
 
是的,短时间内有思路真的很难,所以你一定要学会立马掌握有写作思路的方法
 
——“批判性思维critical thinking”
 
雅思培训 雅思写作 7分
 
“Critical thinking is the ability to apply reasoning and logic to new or unfamiliar ideas, opinions, and situations. Thinking critically involves seeing things in an open-minded way and examining an idea or concept from as many angles as possible.”
 
 
其实批判性思维并不复杂,并不是对任何话题都要持质疑的态度,运用在雅思写作中其实就在于无论个人立场是什么,都能够从多个角度、多个层面上找到支撑自己立场的依据,在向考官解释这些依据时更细致更有层次感。
 
听起来有点复杂?别怕,我们一步一步来修炼“批判性思维critical thinking”
 
 
例题:
With the increasing demand for energy resources of oil and gas, people should look for resources of oil and gas in remote and untouched natural places. Do the advantages outweigh disadvantages of damaging such areas?
 
 
Critical thinking修炼第一级
 
谋篇:确定立场(agree/disagree,pros/cons...)及文章框架
 
首先看题型:利弊
确定立场:the downsides prevail over the merits弊大于利
接着我们来想想框架吧:四段论
Introduction
body 1(益处-控制篇幅)
body 2(弊端)
conclusion
 
Critical thinking修炼第二级
 
立意:概括agree或disagree的大致理由(分论点)
 
Body 1(开发偏远地区能源的益处是什么?)
注意:思考观点时,并不需要剑走偏锋,得出很直观具有代表性的观点就可以了
观点:缓解能源危机(ease the energy crisis)
得出大致段落中心句:Targeting at the potential energies in unexploited areas can ease the energy crisis.
 
Critical thinking修炼第三级
 
能够充分展开论证分论点的合理性
 
展开观点句,注意展开的内容一定要与观点保持一致,不可偏离。
观点:开发偏远地区能源最大的益处在于缓解能源危机(ease the energy crisis)
 
脑内过程:开发偏远地区能源-->能带来益处-->能缓解能源危机-->那为什么要到偏远地区去开发呢,不偏远地区不行吗?-->结合生活-->噢,不偏远地区不够用了-->为什么不够用了?-->人们需求原来越大啊-->没办法只能转移开采地域-->结束了吗?-->没有,偏远地区一定有很多能源吗?-->不一定(为下文埋伏笔),但死马当活马医吧,万一够多呢--> 能源危机有救了!
 
熟练之后,可以更迅速地得出一套有逻辑的key words思维导图:(因为)resources being exhausted-->(因此为了)meet people’s increasing demand--> shift target-->(如果)exist abundant resources--> energy crisis being eased 
 
Critical thinking修炼第四级
 
胸有成竹步入考场,各大话题信手拈来
 
结构第一步,逻辑第二步,表达第三步。
把握住清晰的结构和逻辑,我们的衔接词汇语法才能够一展用武之地。
The most direct benefit of targeting at the potential energies in unexploited areas, evidently, lies in easing the energy crisis confronted by almost every country. Specifically, the fact is that resources like coal and petrol oil are going to be exhausted in a near future, hence for the sake of meeting the increasing population’s demand, it seems more feasible to utilize those from where people have not yet set foot in. If by any chance there exist abundant resources, energy crisis would no longer be worrisome.
 
雅思培训 雅思写作 7分
 
利用这些步骤,我们继续完成主体第二段:
 
Step 1--段落
 
开发偏远地区能源会带来更多严重弊端
Step 2--观点
 
观点1:费人力费物力
观点2:破环当地生态
Step 3--思维导图
 
观点1-->(思考为什么偏远地区较其他而言有什么特征,使得它格外费人力物力)
偏远地区--> (等同于)破村庄/大森林/草原/大海--> (意味着)科技落后/没有设备--> (因此会)耗费大量人力物力-->能源丰富就算了,那(假设)费劲后发现能源量少而得不偿失呢?
remote areas --> undeveloped deep oceans or extensive deserts--> equal those with poor or even no advanced facilities--> energy exploitation costs generous labour and financial forces--> what if there is not as much energy as expected
 
观点2-->(思考为什么在偏远地区开发能源会破坏大自然)
其实不管是不是偏远地区--> 开发能源都会破环环境--> 只是偏远地区很多时候意味着大海/森林/草原等--> 需要格外在意环境问题-->(扣题举例)大海里钻石油会污染海水--> 森林里开采天然气势必要砍树
Tapping resources--> jeopardize the natural environment--> drilling for oil in the ocean--> pollutes the marine water--> extracting natural gas--> leads to deforestation
Step 4--扩充细节,形成段落
 
Nevertheless, provided this practice indeed is carried out, even more problems would emerge. For one thing, remote areas basically equal those with poor or even no advanced facilities, not to mention in the undeveloped deep oceans or extensive deserts, by which I mean energy exploitation would cost generous labour and financial forces. Meanwhile, what if there is not as much energy as expected after long term input? Apart from this, tapping resources would inevitably jeopardize the natural environment. For example, it is always drilling for oil in the ocean that pollutes the marine water and it is extracting natural gas(开采天然气) that leads to deforestation.
 
 
相信你已经通过思维导图方法学会批判性思维critical thinking啦!再加强一下,看看小刘静老师会如何批改你的作文呢!
 
学生习作:
“Building the gap of wealth would be an effective strategy for achieving social harmony. The fact that poor feel treated unfairly would causes less motivation for them to keep their way on life and complain more. In this way, the poor will have resentment toward the affluent, which makes them behave in an anti-social way. This is particularly true when it comes to the poor who commit crime and this phenomenon poses a threat to social stability.”
 
 
理一下段落key words思路:
中心观点:缩小贫富差距有助于社会和谐。
展开论证:穷人收到不公对待--> 缺少生活动力+抱怨--> 仇富--> 反社会--> 犯罪--> 危害社会稳定
 
供参考的思路修改:缩小贫富差距有助于社会和谐--> 原因--> 社会不稳定的重要因素之一--> 犯罪--> 大部分都是由穷人犯下--> 他们这么做的原因在于在社会上受到不公对待--> 具体说例如 难以享受和富人一样的教育和就业机会,甚至日常生活也受歧视--> which滋生了他们的反社会情绪--> 因此,如果能够有效控制贫富差距--> 控制犯罪率--> 社会稳定
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